Narrative+Writing

Narrative Writing



Learning Intention: - To identify and be aware of the different types of settings that can be used in a story. - To write a descriptive setting.

Round Robin/ 2 start/ 1 Share/ 1min 30sec

Share what they have learned so far.

Shoulder partner/Even start/ odd share: What is a setting? Why do we need to have a setting?

=__Setting__ =
 * The setting is the place and time your story is ‘set’. Letting your readers know where and when your story is set will help bring the story to life.
 * If the setting is somewhere your readers aren’t familiar with then make sure you describe it in detail.
 * Two stories can be set in exactly the same place, but feel completely different because of the words the writer chooses to use.
 * Every story needs a setting.



Telephone/3 receivers/Rest callers Activity 1: Settings and characters/genres worksheet - Rally coach/Shoulder partners/Even start.

<span style="background-color: #fce2e2; color: #c81b1b; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 25.6px;">Activity 2:

<span style="color: #800000; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">Choose a setting from the 'settings and characters worksheet' and describe this setting in detail. Use the key words as a guide to form your sentences.

<span style="color: #1e0ab0; font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 160%;">1. Place <span style="color: #1e0ab0; font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 160%;">2. Time <span style="color: #1e0ab0; font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 160%;">3. Weather condition <span style="color: #1e0ab0; font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 160%;">4. Mood or atmosphere <span style="color: #1e0ab0; font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 160%;">5. Your senses

E.g., 1 & 2: I knew I shouldn't have gone to Albert's house last week, but it was a once in a life time opportunity.

LI: Look at how paragraphs and sentences are structured. <span style="background-color: #00ffff; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 170%;">Paragraphs:

<span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 170%;">Working towards paragraphs <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 170%;">Getting started <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 170%;">Linking paragraphs <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 170%;">Paragraph headings <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 170%;">Writing an introductory leaflet for a yoga course <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 170%;">The topic of a paragraph

Find the topic sentence Ans Use the topic sentence Linking words Ans

<span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 170%;">More detailed information on the paragraph <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 170%;">More ideas about developing the body of the paragraph

<span style="color: #0000ff; font-family: 'Arial Black',Gadget,sans-serif; font-size: 140%;">Paragraph Games

Sentence types http://www.eslbee.com/sentences.htm <span style="color: #104d84; font-family: arial,helvetica;">**Quiz on Sentence Types**

<span style="color: #800000; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 190%;">LI: Understand punctuation and how to use it correctly.

<span style="color: #800000; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 190%;">A simple sentence must include a capital letter at the start of the sentence. <span style="color: #800000; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 190%;">You must remember to use an appropriate 'ending' punctuation. <span style="color: #800000; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 190%;">Tell the reader who or what the sentence is about and tell what is or has happened.

<span style="color: #800000; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 190%;">Activity:Make a simple sentence including the information below. <span style="color: #800000; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 190%;">a) Think of a subject <span style="color: #800000; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 190%;">b) What is the subject doing? <span style="color: #800000; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 190%;">c) Think of the 5 ws

<span style="color: #006633; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 190%;">What is a complex sentence? <span style="color: #800000; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 190%;">A complex sentence has an independent clause joined by one or more dependent clauses. It has sub-ordinators (connector words) such as 'as, because, since, after, although, or when. There are also relative pronouns such as 'that, who or which'.

<span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 190%;">Examples:

<span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 190%;">A: //When// he handed in his homework, he forgot to give the teacher the last page. <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 190%;">B: The teacher returned the homework //after// she noticed the error. <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 190%;">C: The students are studying //because// they have a test tomorrow. <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 190%;">D: //After// they finished studying, Juan and Maria went to the movies. <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 190%;">E: Juan and Maria went to the movies //after// they finished studying.

Examples from room 6e

Jacob: "What's that noise?" LIsa asked Dom. Bakhtiyar: In the evening, Greg thought he had a fish on his rod. Freyana: The delicious aroma drifted around as I pulled the wrapper off the chocolate bar.

Compound Sentences Example: The warmer summer weather is disappearing quickly, //but// it's okay because I like how the leaves change colour in the fall.

A compound sentence often combines two sentences with a comma and 'joining word' such as 'and, but, so, yet, because'. If you replace the comma and joining word with a full stop, you should have two complete sentences.

Activity 2: Make a compound sentence using the above activity as a follow on.

Sharing examples from room 6e

Adam: Jack was in the middle of the forest and he swore he heard a crack in the bushes behind that tree. Ying: In the morning, John went down the stairs to get something to eat, but there was nothing in the fridge.

LI: Understanding about paragraphs and using it correctly.

Whole class activity: http://www.bbc.co.uk/schools/ks3bitesize/english/reading/paragraphs/activity.shtml

Work as a whole class to identify the: Topic sentence, connective words and main idea.

<span style="color: #c81b1b; font-family: Symbol,sans-serif; font-size: 120%;">Activity: Look at 3 Harris Burdick pictures and describe the setting and characters.

<span style="color: #c81b1b; font-family: Symbol,sans-serif; font-size: 120%;">1. Uninvited guests <span style="color: #c81b1b; font-family: Symbol,sans-serif; font-size: 120%;">His heart was pounding. He was sure he had seen the door knob. <span style="color: #c81b1b; font-family: Symbol,sans-serif; font-size: 120%;">2. The seven chairs <span style="color: #c81b1b; font-family: Symbol,sans-serif; font-size: 120%;">The fifth one ended up in France. <span style="color: #c81b1b; font-family: Symbol,sans-serif; font-size: 120%;">3. The house on Maple Street <span style="color: #c81b1b; font-family: Symbol,sans-serif; font-size: 120%;">It was a perfect lift off.

LI: Describe a setting using the 5 senses.

Close your eyes and imagine you are in the jungle. The soldiers are after you because you are trying to escape. The river and boat is so close but you have to hide in the bushes for now. What do you hear? How do you feel? What do you feel around you? What can you see? What does the surrounding area smell like? Taste?

Activity: Write a short paragraph about your setting and character description.

Examples from class:

Character Description

By Freyana:

Whooo, swish swish deep down in the middle of a dark forest, the cool breeze gently blew the autumn leaves against a large cauldrone. Bubbling inside was dark green muck. The wicked witch, Witch Madrolda was going to be created. Suddenly the bubbles started getting excited, Witch Madrolda was here! She had black frizzy hair with lots of visible dreadlocks. Her eyes were as red as blood, and when she spoke, silence crept around her listeners. Her favorite hobby was picking on nosey little children and then eating them as a little snack before her scrumptious dinner of toad's eyes. She was a spiteful, sour, wicked witch.

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LI: Brainstorm descriptive verbs and adjectives to describe our witch.

media type="custom" key="9561456" LI: Explore and analyse the language that is used in a character description.

Recall: Face partner, round robin: What have you learned so far?

Warm up: Mix up, Pair up, Share: Music 1. Describe physical appearance. 2. Describe each others' personality. 3. Show action - descriptive verbs.

Activity: Rally Coach: Character Description Worksheet. Team - work together to share their answers.

Warm down 1. What have you learned today? What we will be focusing on tomorrow - Describing a character - Witch

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What is physical appearance? It is looking at someone from the outside and judging them by what they look like, for example, the way they are dressed, their hair, eyes etc.

What does personality mean? What they are like on the inside. It is looking at some from the inside. For example, a bully, a generous person etc.

WALT: Correctly punctuate and use dialogues to move the story along

** Punctuating Dialogue Correctly **

**<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">E ** very time there is a change in speakers, you need to begin a new paragraph; this applies even if it's just two people talking back and forth:

"What did he say?" "The usual. How much he hates his job. How pressured he feels." "What's he going to do?" "He didn't say. Probably nothing. I can't talk to him."

**<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">T ** ry to use INTERRUPTERS like 'Mary said' or 'Bob replied' sparingly. If it's clear who's speaking you don't need to keep identifying the speaker.

**<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">U ** se quotation marks and commas correctly. Here are some examples:

//<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">One sentence of dialogue with the speaker "identification" in the middle: //

"It's raining outside," Heather complained, "and it's only going to get worse."

//<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Two complete statements with the speaker "identification" in the middle: //

"It's raining outside," Heather complained. "How can it rain on my wedding day!"


 * <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Know your characters
 * <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #0000ee; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Every time someone different speaks, start a new paragraph.__
 * <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">__Make sure the readers know who is talking.__
 * <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">__"Said" is a perfectly good word.__
 * <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">__<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #0000ee; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; vertical-align: baseline;"><span class="wiki_link_ext">Punctuate, punctuate, punctuate. __
 * <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">__Internal Dialogue__

**<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 18px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Know your characters ** > If you have invented your own characters, you may have them speak any way you like, as long as it sounds natural for the time and place in which they exist. If you are using someone else's characters, take care to use them properly. Study them. Learn their speech patterns. If you are writing a contemporary story, the characters will use contractions when they speak. Listen. > || <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">**<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Bad example **: || > || <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">"Jim, you are not communicating effectively," Blair said. "I cannot comprehend your meaning." ||^ > > <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 130%; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">|| **<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 20px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Good example: ** || > || <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">"Jim, man, you're not making any sense," Blair said. "I can't understand what you're talking about." || ===<span style="background-color: #ff00ff; color: #006633; font-family: serif; font-size: 18px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">**<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 18px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Every time someone different speaks, start a new paragraph. ** === "Yeah, I'm sure." "Really?" "Yes, Sandburg, really." || ===<span style="background-color: #ff00ff; color: #006633; font-family: serif; font-size: 18px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">** Make sure the readers know who is talking. ** ===
 * <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">**<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Bad example **: ||  || <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">**<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Good example: ** ||
 * "Jim, are you sure?" Blair asked. "Yeah, I'm sure." "Really?" "Yes, Sandburg, really." ||^  || "Jim, are you sure?" Blair asked.

> <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">But don't overdo it. If only two people are talking, you need only identify them occasionally, so the readers can keep them straight. If more than two people are talking, you need to tell the readers who is saying what when. Examples: <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">**<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Two people: ** >> <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">"Jim, I don't get it," Blair said. >> <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Jim raised an eyebrow. "Don't get what, Chief?" >> <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">"This case, man. It doesn't make any sense." >> <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">"Here it comes. Sandburg, what part of 'case closed' don't you understand?" <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">**<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Three people: ** > <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">"I don't get it," Blair said. > <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Jim raised an eyebrow. "Don't get what, Chief?" > <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">"This case, man. It doesn't make any sense." > <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">"Here it comes," Simon groaned. "Sandburg, what part of 'case closed' don't you understand?"

===<span style="background-color: #ff00ff; color: #006633; font-family: serif; font-size: 18px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">**<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 18px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">"Said" is a perfectly good word. ** === <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">It tells the readers what they need to know. It is not necessary to rack your brain trying to find a substitute for "said," or for "asked." It is not even necessary to use "said," except to tell the readers who is speaking (see 3), or to provide a pause between dialogue. Use words other than "said" **<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">only ** when you find it necessary to describe to the readers **<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">how ** the words are being spoken because the dialogue itself does not make that clear. And please remember, if you must use "replied," that your character can only reply if he is answering a question. <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">**<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Examples: ** >> <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">"Don't do that," Blair said. >> <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">"Don't do that," Blair pleaded. >> <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">"Don't do that," Blair ordered. >> <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">"Don't do that!" Blair screamed.

===<span style="background-color: #ff00ff; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 140%; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">**<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #006633; font-family: serif; font-size: 18px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Punctuate, punctuate, punctuate **<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #006633; font-family: serif; font-size: 18px; vertical-align: baseline;">. ===

> <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Here's how, in six easy lessons. > <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">**<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Bad example **: > > <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">"I don't want to." Blair said. > <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">**<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">And ** > <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Blair said. "I don't want to." > > <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">**<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Good example: ** > <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">"I don't want to," Blair said. > <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Or > <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Blair said, "I don't want to." > > <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">**<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Second Good Example: ** > <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">"Blair, you are the most beautiful man I have ever seen," she said. * > <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">(Notice "she" is not capitalized here, because it is part of the same sentence as the dialogue.)
 * <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">When you describe how the dialogue is spoken, that description is part of the same sentence as the dialogue. When the description comes after the dialogue, end the dialogue with a comma, and put a period after the description. When the description comes before, put a comma after the description.
 * <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">If the dialogue is a question or an exclamation, the same rule applies to the description.

<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">**<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Or ** <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Blair screamed, "Leave me alone!" ||^  || <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">"What are you doing?" he asked. <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">**<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Or ** <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">He asked, "What are you doing?" || >> <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">**<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Bad Example: ** >> <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">"You can't do that," Jim walked away from her. >> <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">**<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Good Example ** >> <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">"You can't do that." Jim walked away from her. >> <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">**<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Or ** >> <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">"You can't do that," Jim said, walking away from her.
 * <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">**<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Example: ** ||  || <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">**<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Second Example: ** ||
 * <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">"Leave me alone!" Blair screamed.
 * <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">If what comes before, after, or between the dialogue is not a description of how the words are spoken, it must be treated as a separate sentence, and the first word must be capitalized.

>> <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">**<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Bad Example ** >> <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">"I like that," the anthropologist smiled, "It feels good." >> >> <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">**<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Good Example: ** >> <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">I like that." The anthropologist smiled. "It feels good." >> >> <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">**<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Second Good Example: ** >> >> <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">"What is that?" She peered into the box, and screamed, "Oh, my gosh!" >> <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">**<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Or **(since it should be obvious from the dialogue how she is saying it) >> <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">"What is that?" She peered into the box. "Oh, my gosh!" >> <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">This also applies to using **<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">bold **, //<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">italics //, or underlining for emphasis. Too much, and they no longer mean anything.
 * <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Don't overuse exclamation points! Never, ever do this! If you do it too often, the readers will cease to become excited by them! Use them only when you have to! And never use more than one!!!
 * <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Dashes and ellipses. Ellipses are used when the dialogue is trailing off. If the dialogue trails off, then picks up again, use three periods. If the dialogue trails off without an end, use four periods (actually, an ellipsis with a period). Unless it is a question, in which case, use an ellipsis and a question mark. Dashes are used when there is an interruption, or a hesitation. Of course, ellipses can also be used for hesitation, so...well....
 * <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">**<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Example: ** ||  || <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">**<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Example 2: ** ||
 * <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">"But, Jim," Blair said, "I really thought you should know about...." Oh, what was the use? Jim wasn't listening. ||^  || <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">"Jim, I--I can't." Blair looked away. ||
 * <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">**<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Example 3: ** ||  ||   ||
 * <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">"Jim, look out! It's--" ||^  ||^   ||

> <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">As with exclamation points, be careful not to overuse dashes or ellipses. Most of the time, your characters should be able to finish their sentences.

>> >> **<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Example **: "The problem," Jim said, "is that we don't know her."
 * <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">If you break your dialogue in the middle of a sentence, do not capitalize the first word when you resume.

<span style="background-color: #ff00ff; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 18px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">** Internal Dialogue **
>> <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">This is what you have when your character talks to himself in his head. There are various acceptable ways to indicate internal dialogue. The most common is //<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">italics //. >> <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">**<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Example: ** >> <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">//<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Why am I so stupid? // Blair thought.//<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> How could I have told Ellison he was a throwback to pre-civilized man? // >> >> <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">**<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Second Example: ** >> <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">//<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Why am I so stupid? // Blair shoved his hair back. //<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">How could I have told Ellison he was a throwback to pre-civilized man? // || >> <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">You can also use quotation marks, either double or single. >> <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">"Brilliant, Sandburg," Blair thought. "You just drove your dissertation subject out of your life in under five minutes." >> <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Using quotation marks requires treating the internal dialogue as though it were spoken out loud, with the same rules of punctuation and capitalization, and the ubiquitous "he thought" generally inserted somewhere in order to make it clear to your readers that the character is not, in fact, speaking aloud. Italics do not necessarily require "he thought," and can be intermingled with non-italicized actions, as shown. >> <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">**<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Example: ** >> <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Why am I so stupid? Blair shoved his hair back. How could I have told Jim he was a throwback to pre-civilized man? || >> <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">**<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Example 2: ** >> <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Why was he such an idiot? How could he have done that? Man, I've had it, now. Ellison's never gonna work with me. I'll be lucky if he doesn't rip my head off right here. || >> <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">**<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Example 3: ** >> <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Gosh, he was so stupid! First, he lied to get Ellison in here, then he told him he was some kind of cave man. You idiot, Sandburg. You've completely blown it. LI: Identify different ways to start a sentence or open a story.
 * <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">**<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: serif; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Example ** ||

In groups, use think-write-round robin to give knowledge about how to start a story or sentence. Number 1 will share information collated after their sharing.

<span style="color: #000080; font-family: Symbol,sans-serif; font-size: 140%;">Ways to start a sentence or open up a story: <span style="color: #000080; font-family: Symbol,sans-serif; font-size: 140%;">1. Use a question. <span style="color: #000080; font-family: Symbol,sans-serif; font-size: 140%;">2. Thinking / thought <span style="color: #000080; font-family: Symbol,sans-serif; font-size: 140%;">3. Character Description <span style="color: #000080; font-family: Symbol,sans-serif; font-size: 140%;">4. Dialogues <span style="color: #000080; font-family: Symbol,sans-serif; font-size: 140%;">5. Problem <span style="color: #000080; font-family: Symbol,sans-serif; font-size: 140%;">6. Action <span style="color: #000080; font-family: Symbol,sans-serif; font-size: 140%;">7. Onomatopoeia / sound words <span style="color: #000080; font-family: Symbol,sans-serif; font-size: 140%;">8. Setting <span style="color: #000080; font-family: Symbol,sans-serif; font-size: 140%;">9. Time connectives - e.g., Lastly, After midnight, Not long after, Meanwhile etc.

Activity: Worksheet: work with your shoulder partner and take turns to complete the worksheet.

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Write a story using one 1 of these pictures. Remember to plan your story first and use your checklist when you edit your work.
 * [[image:http://www.deviantart.com/download/96617947/Well__There__s_Your_Problem_by_jbwarner86.png width="325" height="294"]] || [[image:http://pcpt.files.wordpress.com/2008/11/imagen21.jpg width="408" height="310"]] ||
 * [[image:http://us.penguingroup.com/static/packages/us/yreaders/camjansen/allaboutmys_chars.gif align="center"]] || [[image:http://www.celebcosmeticsurgery.com/wp-content/uploads/2011/04/bully.jpg align="center"]] ||

Checklist:

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